Pass the PLANNED Story (1)

WALT: write using the structure of a narrative.

One day, a boy named James was walking around the city, he went to a cafe to have his breakfast. While he was half way on finishing his bagel. Everyone started screaming, after he had finished, he went outside. For some reason no one was there.

He was starting to get nervous, but he still managed. While he was walking a creature tried to attack him. But he definitely heard those big loud steps. So he did a backflip over him, and punched that creature. The creature was unconscious. He was so confused on why there's a creature attacking him. Afterall, he didn’t even know what that creature was. He went on google and specifically describe what the creature had.

It apparently was a boar, it didn’t look like one, or feel like one. It’s so rust, like metal. He thought it was a robot, but he knew he was a crazy thinker.

He walked a few more steps and two more tried to tackle him. He just ran to his best friends house. But while that was happening, he saw like a teenager in a boar costume, but with a head like Megamind.

He saw that I was going somewhere but then he just disappeared.

When he finally got to his house. His best friend,  Zelina looked suspicious. She was grinning a lot, but of course he trusted her.

What I good friend, am I right? Well he explained what happened and Zelina looked surprised. But James said “We should work with each other to defeat those wild boars!”. Zelina agreed, but in hesitation. He didn’t know what was up with her but he ignored it.

They made a plan, and the plan was to just give food. Like meat, cows, chicken but never pig. Pigs are just James favourite animals. Zelina wanted to distract them, she did it. But when she disappeared when she turned, The boar master came. Weird, it’s like she already knew the plan. The boars were already full!  James tried to warn Zelina. It worked. Zelina survived. After one whole day, it was still going. But Zelina wasn’t that suspicious anymore. Maybe she was tired. She did mention to James that she works for 12 hours straight. Zelina started being way more serious, like she did have some really great ideas. Like “Burn them and then we should eat them”. Which is really disgusting, but it was a really good idea.

They did that plan, let me explain how good or bad it went. First we tried burning some sticks and throw them at the boars. It didn’t work, again it’s like the boar master know. Lastly they tried just burning some sticks, until it’s burning hot. 

Then they tried fighting with it. Instead they just burned their own hands. They just got sick of the fire. That they were trying to do something else.

Then Zelina became gross, she said “ We should vomit in a bucket and then add our boogers in the vomit! They might die!”That's just disgusting, but they tried it anyway. Did I mention that Zelina can easily barf? I just found that out when she vomited in the bucket in like 5 seconds, and 5 more seconds it’s already filled up. Then she told James to do the boogers part, but he refused. So Zelina did it. She picked her nose and got all the boogers and put it in the vomit. Disgusting, there were like little pieces of sausage skins. It wasn’t even green! It was literally brown and yellow mixed up together. Of course James let Zelina do it because James will be blind when he looks inside the bucket. Sadly, he still did it. The power of force, I guess?

While that was happening, he didn’t barf! Which is really impressive.

He dumped the vomit and boogers on gang of boars, but it just slipped out of the boar and went on the ground? It’s like they’re waterproof too.

Then they decided to take a break. It’s like they’re trying to find something that’s really important. They’re not getting James and Zelina when they sleep.

James is going to investigate. He pretended to sleep, so he could spy on Zelina. After a few hours, he silently, like a ninja went to her room and she wasn’t there. She’s definitely up to something.

He didn’t know what she was up too though. Maybe she’s the boar master? But James knew she would never betray her best friend.

Well most people wouldn’t. Zelina must be a fake best friend, who knows! Because she was acting suspicious before. He had a plan. But he was figuring out how to do it. But he’s gonna make a test, he’s gonna make a fake plan. Then he will tell it to Zelina to see if the boar master will know the counters.

But if it does happen, he definitely knew who it was.  Were all pretty sure it would be Zelina. 

First of all, let me tell you the real plan. The real plan was to throw water at the boars, because they did feel like a robot first of all. And the system of the robot would be messed up. The fake plan was to try to kill them by hand. I don’t know how Zelina would fall for it, but she actually did!

When they did the fake plan, they had a laser cannon on their forehead. That’s when you know something is up, James pretended to distract them. Instead, he went back to Zelina’s place and filled up some balloons with water. Ready for action?

Well, it’s not that exciting. It’s EXTREMELY EXCITING. He was ready to confront Zelina.  James told Zelina to go back to the place after he got all those balloons filled.

When he was outside with one robotic boar with a laser, he threw a balloon at the boar. Guess what? The boar died in 1 balloon, that’s when you know it’s actually a robot.

He saw the boar master and rushed to it. Well actually, he slowly went there. I guess he was just slow? Actually, he’s slower than a snail.

He was surprised that all those robots were scared of him. It’s freaky that robots actually have a brain.  Well when James finally got to that master, he saw Zelina. But that’s not all, there's way more people! This must be her job! He thought her job was at McDonalds. She must have lied! Zelina pushed James away and said “Sorry, and Goodbye”. Zelina actually hated her job, but it was the only way to earn money. 

She did make sacrifice button, which basically means explode the robot. She told James to run, I guess Zelina was going to press the button.

If you guessed what I guessed, you’re right. She did press the button, but guess what? It didn’t work, it didn’t explode.But it did leap away like a Ballerina. I guess that was her goodbye. I guess that was a happy and sad ending? 

Then James decided to be like the robot and leap away like a ballerina.

The End.

Task description.

Mr. Goodwin made up a new game, we had to pass our Chromebooks and they have to choose something about that character. Like that character is funny. Then we tried to finish it off and post it on our blog. That's it!

Labels: 2019, Mr. Goodwin, Pt England School, Writing 2019