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Thursday 23 August 2018

Goat Wonderland.



Goat wonderland


Once there was a Goat that was really rich and fancy. Max tried to robbed it in the richest street ever, “Goat Wonderland”. The earth was called Goat territory . The Goat station was helping them to catch the stinky robber in the Modern Goat House.




Max the Skunky Goat


Max was so skunky that he didn't shower for his whole life! Everyone was not even looking at him, Because you could smell the smell all the way in another world! Even the planet. Max decided to go to another country and go in Goat Wonderland which is in Australia. He stank up the whole place that he went to houses and tried to say “Hi”. But everyone was ignoring him. He got so mad that he started robbing.




THE ROBBING IS STARTING NOW#


He started robbing, He started with his unlucky number, The Address was 13. 13 was the richest and the nicest and moneyed family. Amber knew everything, He grabbed her phone and took a photo. Max grabbed a card made of plastic and it in the middle to open it, But first he rang the bell. The Mum Lina looked in the keyhole and saw a beauty island. It had a shining marble bench, The robber took off the picture and put a flashlight in the peephole.



The Blind Mom


The mom got blind, She couldn't see and she accidentally opened the door. But she shut it because she knew he opened the door. But Max got a keycard and opened it. MAx went inside stole all the diamanté in the bathroom.Of course, Max is french. The bathrooms are always Max’s first target, He can steal the jewelry and sell it for money. Amber noticed the robbing, She tried to call the cops, But there was no electricity.




Make him calm and calm.


Amber decided to make him relax, She said Please don’t rob us, Were trying to be nice to everyone. We can donate you if you want Amber said. Max got calm, But he still was mad, He punched Amber and nearly killed her. NO! Max said. She damaged her really bad that she fainted, Max decided to stomp on her and the blood came out of her mouth, He stopped.




Rest in peace, Ripped in pieces..
Max went to the mom and ripped the skin, The Mom looked like a monster, But luckily the fake mom was the baby sitter. Amber realized and cried so hard, She went under the bed when Max realized her crying. Max stopped and looked for Amber. Amber went out of the window and alerted everyone.



Cops, Cops finish this story..
The cops heard Amber and they ran drove straight there. The Cops put there pistols out, And Max cried, and gave the stuff back. The Cops were about to shoot but Amber said STOP, Why are you crying?”. Everyone abused me and bullied me and I thought I was a loser Max said, Amber said I DON’T CARE, You killed my Babysitter! And you damaged me Amber said. YOU MUST GO TO JAIL YOU MONSTER!





The Beautiful new Picture.
YEARS LATER
The new makeover was amazing, It was the number 1 picture, Marble bench. A dried out mountain and sometimes a peachy yellow colour of the sky, The clouds. was steaming and it was so silent. Max went and apologised. The new beautiful island is here. You could even see it from the peephole.


This was my writing, I hope you enjoyed. My partner was Zoe and we need the peer editing thing. What I needed to do better is using lots of descriptive words. That's my goal for next week. enjoy.








2 comments:

  1. Hi Simon! I really like your descriptive writing. Keep it up and also I feel like it too long but a lot of details.

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    1. Thanks Anamaria, I didn't do well on this writing, So I'm glad to liked it!

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